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at you (past you.) this worked. however, it used "you" twice in four words. ack. it just sounded awkward read aloud. I only let it stay and felt much colder ...

Self-piteous and cliche ridden? Perhaps. But who isn't? And I believe the way that Brad writes such overrun themes transforms it into something a bit more. Actually, on a truly ...

I feel that you could expand on this, because the idea is rather complimentary. I also believe that you should change the title, as it happens to seem...irrelavant to the ...

Most of your poetry is very enjoyable because you convey flashing image after image that somehow seem related, and beautiful - sharing a common underlying feeling. Still, I feel that ...

i didn't really enjoy the addition of the Ramona lyrics. first off, it was partly not even your own work - half of it was song quotes. secondly, they intervals ...

wow. the imagery was stunningly beautiful. this poem was perfect but for one minor flaw i see... Being blown about On the scent of a summer breeze Blowing through the ...

the rhythm was off, so i suggest you read this aloud and omit needless words, or add them. the rhyme appeared random, which is fine, but somewhat forced - not ...

howling into noon-time suns with unsharpened, unthrusted knives, getting roped, dragged off by a dusty Brain locked away, there are too many syllables in these lines and it does appear ...

beautiful. would later drive you crazier, than he ever could, and (then) drag you to the cliff, where he and she stood (with) his arm on her shoulder, i didn't ...

How do expect to improve when you won't accept suggestions? We don't pressure you do change your works, but merely offer ways that we believe you can improve it. I ...

Okay, I hope you know that commenting back on your own work and other comments is discouraged. I mean, I admit that I've violated that "rule", as well, but I ...

Personally, I would love to critique your work if it wasn't for your previously exampled disregard for it. This site is for the growth of writing...or something like that...and the ...

there's no definite rhythm. the lines vary from long to short, and sparatically so. oh, and change the title on the board, please. it made me unwilling to read it, ...

okay, listen to snoink rhymathically. otherwise, the poem, albiet good, was a bit dramatic in flavor. i mean, i'm unsure if this actually happened, but it didn't really matter... i ...

the lesson was a bit long winded. i would cut it down. Cuts, scrapes, and the occasional “owie.” owie? sort of draws from the poem? i mean, it does fit, ...